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Can someone give me some comments on a poem i wrote for my ex girlfriend? Read description please!

If there is anything i should add, change, or take out, please let me know! i want this to be perfect! Comments good or bad are greatly appreciated! Thanks guys!

May

It was just a year ago, just last may
I let your heart go, shattering like clay
Scared to admit it,
Scared to show it,
Scared to commit to it,
I knew I’d blow it
Teenagers in love, who would’ve thought
We kissed, we loved, we missed, we fought
My love for you is all I got
Please, dont leave it here, left to rot
Even today, nothing has changed
Even since may, feelings the same
You own my heart
You own my thoughts
We can’t be apart
No matter if we fought
If you forgive me, I promise you this
You and I are meant to be, let’s not dismiss
This poem may be cheesy, but I’m not letting you go easy
It’s happened before, I can't take it
Let’s give it an encore; I know we can make it
Every things in the past, there’s nothing we can do
If there’s one thing I’ve learned forsure that’s…
I love you.

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In my opinion, it is a nice poem to start with since you have explained your feelings steps by step. However, I think it is not a good idea to go back to an ex, but if you really feel you can head somewhere with her, then go for it.

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aww you are trying to get her back she would agree to go back out with you that was so sweet

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Thats so sweet:) well its why did ya'll brake up?

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i dont even know....
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Well with that poem, how could she say no? Good luck with your girl!
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Welcomes!
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I LOVE it!!!You did start loosing me around the middle but the girl will either read it all or not at all.

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Amazing , she should be happy ... If she's a nice person . But remember not all relationships last forever and be aware of the chance she might say no or have a bf.

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Is your brothers name Ben Lewis ?

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no

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I like that poem.

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It is sweet. If it has been a year, she might be over you though. You could try, but don't get your hopes too high. Is she the type that would fall for something like that? Keep in mind that teenage relationships don't normally last. I'm going to be honest with you: It's been a year, get over her already.

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Change "that's" to "it's" or "it's that" at the end and separate "forsure" so it says "for sure".

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You are awesome I wish I had a boyfriend who wrote poetry you should give it to her.

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xXCourtneyXx

Wow. How can she say no to you, after this lovely poem. I love it, so I'm sure she'll love it :) Great job dude

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It sounds just fine. How come you broke up?

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Thats amazing she CAN'T say no.. She WILL say yes!

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Deep Poet! U have many layers of meaning..good poem!

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smalm

She will totally love you again and that poem is nice...very deep!

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Soooo sweet i think she will definitely get back with u

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its sweet, but to some girls... poems these days are just weak

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lovely and amazing!!!! did you come up with it your self? hope she accepts it

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i love it

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omg any girl would take you back after that! unless you made out w/ her best friend..... then its a maybe

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thats sooo sweet

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Great poem all most made me cry lol.

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DragonGIrl5678

That was beautiful! I'm sure she'll go out with you now. How can anyone say no to something so beautiful!

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