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Please help me fix this paragraph? I want it to be longer, and more meaningful. Please read on(:

So I want to send this to a friend because he's been feeling really down lately: "I'm sorry you're unhappy :( It hurts me to know that.. I know that probably doesn't makes sense, but it does to me. I want you to be happy :( Please don't forget that you'll always have me, and I'll always be by your side. If you need anyone to talk to, I'm always here. I know I have told you that before, but I just want to remind you of it. You're amazing, and don't ever think otherwise. You're my best friend <3 Please be happy :(". Please let me know how I can make it longer or improve it in anyway. Thanks!

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add more descriptive words, your words speak more than the faces, and try using different ending punctuation marks to express the feeling in the words more! ;)
-hope this helps!

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Idk if you were planning on putting the frowny faces in there or not, but they are depressing and take away from the paragraph. Other than that, it is good.

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*but just to remind you. No need of the other parts in that sentence

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Wow. I wish my friend said something like that to me. Sorry i am not good in grammar and essays,so can't help u

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It good :)

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To improve it, try writting the problem somewhere in there. This show that (if it's a people problem) that some people can listen and are not just d!cks. If you don't know the problem he's having then tell him your ready to listen whenever he wants to tell you. DO NOT try to force the info out of him. And tell him/her in person.

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You might say something about remembering the good, and learning from the bad, and that this too will pass, like high school. LOL

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what kind of friend....

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