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My poems finally finished is it good?

Taking one glance into the endless ocean,
I take a deep breath and jump.
I swim for what seems like days, weeks.
But I never seem to move anywhere.
Squinting in the salty water I find nothing.
nothing but dark water around me.
Panic shoots me in the stomach and
Pain strikes me in the chest.
But I keep going.
I fight the waves taking me farther away but
Then I just float.
The pain begins to subside and I feel peaceful.
But I can't leave this way.
I turn and swim towards the light.
Breaking through and gulping the fresh air
I finally reach the shore.

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Really impressive! When I was reading your poem, I could imagine and feel it. :)

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Good job! I like it

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Yeah that's really good!!:)

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Really , this is a very good poem ; it was a pleasure to read .
=)

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Kinda long...I'll get back to you tomorrow...promise.

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Yep, it's pretty good...
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Meh...

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Wow you should check into becoming a Poet writer!

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beautiful_flowers

That's great!!!:) Great job!

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A beautiful poem :) keep writing!!!

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I like it:) nice work.., maybe put some more on here..

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Awesomeness!!! :D

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Not to be mean but I like it but its not outstanding

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safairina

" Panic shoots me in the stomach and
Pain strikes me in the chest.
But I keep going."
these lines are so awesome. keep it up.

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WOW!!! that was awesome...

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Aww.. this is good.. However, it was kinda lonely.. but it did end up with hope :3 i like it ^^

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I liked it. You were really descriptive! If it's for a grade, I think you'll definetly get an A.

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