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What does this poem of mine seem to you and is it good or bad?

Why is so much pain inflicted upon me?
I want to be happy so why can't I just be?
My heart aches and hurts almost everyday
I guess it's my fault and I'll have to pay
Only if life was meant to be perfect and beautiful
Then maybe right now I would not feel so pitiful
It's a battle I must face alone miserably
But in the end I know it will just be terribly
As tears begin to stream down my face
My heart soon starts to beat at an unbalanced pace
Everyone walks past me wearing a smile
It disgusts me so badly that I turn bile
Why is it I don't feel loved or wanted around?
Is it maybe perhaps I don't make one single sound?
I shudder and dread at the fear of this
That my family just wants me to depart from them and dismiss
I stir deep into my thoughts in order to think
While at the same time I'm trying to hang onto what seems like a brink
I right now am heading for a nervous breakdown
But people instead of help rather laugh and call me a clown
If it is because nobody wants to take the blame
Then just put it all on me and I'll gladly feel the shame
I love you all very much my dear family and this be a true clause
And if nothing else I think I deserve at least one last applause....

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Hey, wait a minute, the poem is great, but as a poet who writes poems like this sometimes, I'm getting some bad inference from this. Are you okay? By the ending of that, seems like you are going to end your life, and that isn't the answer, been there, thought about that long and hard, and it isn't worth it to end it all, if something is wrong, find help, if you can't, then as someone who is been there, I may be able to offer some support.

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I have faced countless times of wanting to end my life and have actually attempted it 7 times growing up, but now am able to overcome it just some times it comes onto me strongly with full force. And I can fight it off or try and talk to somebody or just with my cousin and them make me laugh or smile so I can forget about it. Thanks too also...
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Okay, as long as you can make it through.

I hope you can eventually find real and true happiness, i'm sure someone can bring you that, just search for them.
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Thanks!
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no problem, you just focus on being happy!
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I know the feeling, I don't like the poem.
You okay Natalie?

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Not much, but I think I'll survive it's just a feeling I get when around my family and everybody else like I get on their nerves or something and have actually got into arguments with a few. It's just quiet stupid and ridiculous and weak of me to be like this at times or almost always, but am able to hide it.. Sorry :((
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That's alright, nothing for you to be sorry for
Chin up, buttercup
=)
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Huh thanks that actually made me smile. ^__^
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I have the song "Hit That" by The Offspring stuck in my head, and it doesn't want me to sleep lol
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Oh forever more Josh you nut haha then why don't you go and hit that on somebody then go to sleep Lol =)
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I hate to sleep, I'd
And as for hitting that, ummmmm yeah =), in my head...........................................................
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Why in your head?
I'm pretty sure there are lot of girls there to help you play out with this song haha and I thought it was great even though of what he were singing about it didn't seem too bad though Lol xD
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Great song, just doesn't match my personality lol
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The song doesn't match your personality?
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The song would be full of s3xual activity, and my personality doesn't match the song lol... ANYWAY, I hope you're at least starting to feel better?
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Well, it would only match a person who always wanted that like everyday and yeah anyways I'm starting to come around.. Thanks
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Very good to hear Rosey cheeks =)
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Haha your kind and sweet good night! ^__^
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I'm blushing =)
G'nite
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Hey there Rose , Are you still there ?
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If you are wanting to write a depressing poem I suggest not rhyming the lines. It reads like a Dr Seuss book.

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Bit harsh and cruel towards someone who is obviously in pain.
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Indeed it is harsh. Writing is an art form. The person that is creating this art has the right to mold in any way shape or form that they wish. It is a creative outlet, and whatever works for them as far is writing styles go is okay. It is art just the same. It doesn't have to rhyme or not rhyme or be written certain way for it to get the feelings and emotions that they're feeling deep inside to come out.
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Your answer seemed harsh, but truth considering if this even is hurts and I repect your honesty too...
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Beautiful. I really love your poem :)

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Thank you...
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Your welcome :)
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gIt is very good. Your deepest thoughts and depressions come out very clearly and well written. I would put a few metaphors in there, like "my heart is missing something, like a flower without a stem, like a rose without a thorn" or " my thoughts and emotions, stacked like books hi upon a shelf, kept a secret, kept only for myself". But even without it is amazing. It reminds me of some of my old writings. Writing is a good way to work out how you feel without actually doing it, I know it helped me through my hardest times. I just hope that you don't follow through with what you were suggesting in that last line. You deserve an applause for the poem. Things seem so terrible at times, even unlivable. I can promise you that things do get better, because they do. There is always a light at the end of the tunnel. You just have to make it to the end of the tunnel.

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Welll said!:-).
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Thankyou witt, I appreciate it.
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Your welcome Cloud.:-).
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Thank you Cloudflower it was pretty hard for me to actually ask about this and type it for people to read and let me know what they thought about it...
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I can imagine so, blackrose. It puts you in a very vulnerable state. It almost makes you feel like you're standing butt naked in a room full of people. It is sometimes hard to let people know who you really are and what you really feel. I didn't let anybody read any of my poems for years. Im glad you did though, I really enjoyed reading it.
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That's exactly how I felt haha and thanks too a whole lot!
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No problemo :-) and thankyou!
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thats veryyy amazing. it describes my whole life situation ive been in for a loong time.... it spoke to my soul, bro... you should be a poet!

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Thanks and am glad it did I have had thoughts on being one, but I would not know if I would be able to become one or not and I do find comfort in writing poems explaining with how I feel...
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Think you are expressing your feelings straight up and trying to work through them by writing it all out. Also crying out for help that is sorely lacking from your family in your view and you wish they would see that and be there for you by recognizing and validating your feelings.
Help isn't always available from those you want it from the most; sometimes you have to look outward for help and validation, try leaning on your friends who care and if possible find a professional to talk to who might help you find ways to cope. You sound way too deep in the dumps to be dealing with this alone! Keep writing and don't give in to the depression!:-).

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And yes, think it's a good poem.:-).
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Thanks your description in answer is exact and I do believe I need somebody to help, but it is my problem and I don't like for anybody else to be dragged in on how I feel and what's wrong or going on with me. I instead like to try and help people out rather than myself and also through poetry it seems to help out. It was actually hard for me to put this up for everybody to read and answer what they all thought...
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Know how you feel about reaching out, have that same problem and was way worse when was younger , but looking back I wish I had gotten help in working through stuff sooner.. It may have kept me from some of the stupid damaging stuff got myself into and finally after years did manage to work through with help.
Had to realize that only by asking and accepting from others could I truly become the person I wanted to be; liking and respecting myself, and in so doing better able to help others also.:-).
Sometimes reaching out is a sign of strenght not weakness.
Writing is a great way also, and by sharing it your showing that strength, putting yourself out there for all to see and yeah of course judge, can be a great way of working through things, and thanks for sharing that!
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Well, it surely is original. Seems decent. Better than most can write.
Good job. Keep at it!
If this is you expressing your feelings, I hope you may feel better.

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Thanks and yeah is me expressing them, but I am able to get better quickly at times...
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Well, It is good to express your feelings sometimes. Not sure if it may help you, but it helps some relieve pain (Emotional, Physical, Mental)and stress by expressing their feelings. Such as Painting, Drawing, Writing, or some other form of expression.
And I will say again, A good poem.
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Well said Bambino!:-).
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More like apple pie in the morning, am I right?

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I have no idea what you meant by that, BUT I LIKE IT!
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Please follow back, i havn't got a lot of followers jet...
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What are you even talking about? Lol
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its kind of dark....your very talented

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Yeah I thought so too, but I mean writing poems like this when feeling down and explaining how I feel by putting it in words in the poem helps relive some of the stress and tension. And also thank you...
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why don't get them published ... I would buy anything you write... and how are you rose ... i was worried after i read this it was kind of intense
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I am seriously thinking about becoming a Poet writer, but I don't know yet and am not quiet sure for the time being. And that's nice and sweet of you saying you woud buy anything I wrote. I've been doing okay just when at the time I wrote this I was going through a rough time and there at the end of the poem was like saying basically if anything one more last applause from my family I loved that I felt at times didn't want me around or loved me. I was talking about them do that for me before I commited suicide. I know everybody has their rough times and bad times when nothing seems perfect, but I can easily be brought down and think ridiculous things like just whatever...
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I love you Rose You are my big sister !
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Well done Rose , and if you get this I really need to talk to you.

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Alright Angel if on here I'm on email right now...
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Hey I just sent you a message on yahoo
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I like it...... Actually I loved it...!!! <3 <3 <3

It really expresses the pain in you!!
Hope you get the desired and deserved happiness in life!!

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Thank you and yes, it explains how I feel at times. But thanks again!
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yaaa........ you are always welcome....!!!

Are you under a serious depression kinda thing?
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Yeah, I'm trying to recover from it, but am doing alright some.
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oohk.... hope you recover soon!!
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good luck...
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Hey... that's awesome!!

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Thank you! ^__^
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anytime!! :)
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