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Creative Writing: “It was dark when I saw it” Ideas?

I have to write a creative writing piece, and it must contain “It was dark when I saw it”. Ideas?

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I came to the scrying pool seeking answers. IT WAS DARK WHEN I SAW IT and I bent over it staring, but to no avail. Tears of frustration crept into my eyes and one dropped and struck the surface, creating ripples that reached toward the side. It was as though I had turned on a light. The pool began to glow with an eerie luminescence and there, deep below its surface, an image began to form...

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Midnight had passed without me noticing. The bar closed and I swallowed the last of my Jack Daniels before stumbling into the street. I didn't want to return to my empty apartment and made my way aimlessly along the pavement, still wet from the evening's rain. Eventually I found myself walking down a dirty alley, strewn with refuse and dumpsters. There I tripped over a shape, a man's body. IT WAS DARK WHEN I SAW IT...

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Gripping, doze, *gripping*
...but, "scrying pool"? Ima hafta looky that one uppy
I used to be a jd fan myself, back in my youth. Bad decisions, Doze, bad decisions.
I hope you are grand, my dear friend
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Funny, I haven't been on for a while, and the very first question I'm interested in-- here you are too
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I preferred Johnny Walker myself. That ended the night I fell off the train. Cheap lesson. Now I have a glass of wine with a meal and that's about my limit.

Scrying ... it's like a crystal ball, or a magic mirror, or a pool, or something you can look into and see what's happening elsewhere (or elsewhen). I knew it'd be a problem but it seemed to fit in that context. I might even use it myself and write another story.

All's well in Oz, Sas. Hope all's well in your world, too.
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Sas, I have an Ask folder on my bookmarks toolbar and half half a dozen of the special people on it so I can check their answers first. Since you were one of the first to be added I always know when you've been on.

BTW if you're not following JohnOGaunt you might want to do that. He's a crusty old expatriate English lettuce leaf.
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Oh dear, now *that* is thigh slapping good humor-- falling off a train. Have you written of that yet? I'd like to read it.
Thank you for enhancing my vocabulary:)
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Don't think I've written about it anywhere, though I should. I was probably too drunk to hurt myself (fell relaxed) and woke up in hospital next morning. But there was something rather special attached to it that I might share with you by email. That would also give me the chance to ask about your T., who I hope is going OK now.
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Shoot me an email then if ya have half a chance. T is excellent, I thank ye kindly for asking
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Shall do, Sass. Probably not immediately though. No later than tomorrow.
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What a great, imaginative answer Dodgy. You are just the best writer!
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Thanks, Taise. With no response from alexanderu it's impossible to know whether it helped or not.
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Well I loved it and I guess the poster isn't going to answer. Best answer here!
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I think we'll share that honour, Sin. I loved yours.
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This was a great Q&A! Very enjoyable. Stars to all!
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Do you mean, you need an idea of something to see? What ever it was you will be questioned because..It was dark when you saw it..so maybe you did not see it quite right or you missed a very important piece.

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Idea for the story :D
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you should focus on something that interests you or something you have actually had experience with. this way you can relate to it personally and the writing project will become much easier and maybe if your lucky it might be enjoyable.
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Bigfoot...?

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You called?
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I hoped you'd notice this one, Sas. The very hide...
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Ahh I seem to have attracted a Bigfoot Why hello there
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Hello:)
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Lol it's nice to meet you
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it was dark when i saw it, your shadow casting a long image across my retina.

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Write about the paranormal.
Ex: As I walked down the creepy stairs that lead to the basement you could almost feel the evil, it was dark when I saw it, like it was hiding from me... Lol yea I'm not that much of a writer as you can see :D

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Listen to the song Black Sabbath (by Black Sabbath) for inspiration...it was written from a dream.

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... and then I saw it - Mothman, standing 8 ft. tall with red eyes and wearing a snappy tux from Men's Wearhouse.

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... and eating a brisket sammich
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...and eating a brisket sammich
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So tasty, he ate two! :D. Lol!
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Damn Squatch - now I want one too!!!
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With extra BBQ sauce !
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saw wat exactly?!

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ahahahahaha!!!! lollollol
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It took years for it to happen to me, though with some they had been born with it and with others they had aquired it quickly. It started with one thing, then another, and soon the cruelness of others began to topple on top of me until I was covered with it's by-products...cruelness, selfishness, disregard for my fellow human beings, and an overall distain for emotion except the sweet taste of revenge. I walked through life with not a care for anyone but myself and my own feelings which I fed with hatred. One day, a woman with a small child came up to me and asked me for money for food. I said," No, find your own way. I had to." She smiled and said she knew I wasn't who I was so desperately trying to display I was because she new I had a good heart. I said," Lady, god just revealed my heart to me last night when I prayed for the first time in my life, and when I was shown my heart, it was dark when I saw it."
****Then take that part and change it to where she proves to the person that he did not see a dark heart, but a heart covered with darkness that could be removed through love.

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Are you a writer by chance? That was really well done.
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Wow! Sincerity, you MUST use this in a short story. It's so well written and interesting.
Sincerity, after all this time, I'm finally able to follow you. I've made a new account and keeping my head down due to so many deletions and no access to connections.
You just have to keep writing. You are good at it.
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Sin, that's great.
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@Taise: You were one person I would never have expected to get deletions. Glad you're up and running again.
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I was convinced right from the start and had to finish up to the end. It built suspense which is Luke candy to many. Awesome little piece.
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Geez! Thanks guys ! Okay...I'm going to have to do it-going to have to start writing because I've had too much great feedback from Ask. Just typed it off the top of my head.
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@Taise-was JUST thinking you should start a new account . YAAAY! let's get this party started!
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@Taise. I'm with OzMan. Why in the world would you suffer deletions?
@Sin. Go for it!
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The darkness of the night had fallen, impeding the vision that confronts me. or something like that.

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