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Hello I am wondering if you guys could help me translate this poem I made into a haiku or make it a better poem if is to hard for a haiku.

A future bright, with blind eyes to hold, a future life to which we hold. forever strong with day by day, ending nay, one to two, soon we shall, due in time, when the hourglass fades, to lovers must shine, when blossom more lovely than a morning glory.

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The poem would not make a good haiku, which typically is a description of nature. Any attempt to make it a haiku would ruin the structure of the poem, and there would be too many editorial decisions. It's best to make a haiku up from scratch, perhaps using a picture of a natural setting as inspiration. For example:
The running fox leaps
The frightened mouse is caught fast
Snow falls on wet fur

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Okay this isnt true traditional haiku since as others said, haiku traditionally deals with nature but i this this is haiku form. Its 5-7-5 anyhow. Looses alot tho. Prettier in its original form.:
A bright future life
Day by day forever strong
for lovers to shine

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