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I already asked this once already, but i forgot to add a few details. Im trying to write this song for a girl i like named Hannah. She is crazy and loves most of the same things as me. I have liked her for about 2 yrs now and im just really shy and awkward around her. Right now im not to worried about the sound of it. Here are my current lyrics: "I feel invisible to her. Why can't she see how much i care for her. Even when she looks at me, she looks right past me." Im planning on it being a romantic post-hardcore song. Let me know what you think and if anybody has any suggestions about adding, deleting, or changing some part, it would be appreciated.

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I love Hannah
She lives in Savannah.
I like to watch her eat a banana,
while wearing a bandana.

I'm kinda shy
just that kind of guy.
When I wear a suit,
I wear a bow tie.

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*holds up lighter*
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encore, encore, encore
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Do you think I have a future as a songwriter?
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I don't have any lyric ideas but be confident girls love confidence :) good luck

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That's a pretty cool idea! If you are planning on singing it directly to her include how much you love her and some of the things that you like about her.

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Thanks! I only wish i could sing it to her but like i said im kinda shy and i dont think i can sing well.
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Here is what I do when I write songs/poetry. I take a notepad and paper and I go somewhere quiet and soothing. Relax your body and just think. The words will come to you. Think about the person and don't just write ordinary, easy lyrics. Think deeper and really express your feelings. This sounds so cheesy but it really works.

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I think this advise is excellent!!! Just go with it...what do you hs e to lose? Guve it your all...you can do this!!!
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How do i melt her heart of ice/ how do I make her see what she really means to me/ baby it's time you realize that you have made my dreams come to life/ I don't want to be your acquaintance I don't want to be your friend I want so much more from you I wanna love you till the end/.... I hope this helps I've always loved writing lyrics and poems good luck

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I know someone who had the same problem. He sang me this song and it worked. I married him!

"Pretty Lady".
Music and Lyrics by Lighthouse. I see you each morning, and in silence I say
"Pretty Lady, I love you, but I know there's no way
You'd consider my love girl, cuz you don't have the time."
So I try to conceal it, so you can't read my mind.All I wanna do, Pretty Lady, is see you smilin' too, Pretty Lady
Just for once in my life, makin' love to you. Yeah!
All I wanna do, Pretty Lady, is see you smilin' too, Pretty Lady
And maybe once in my life makin' love to you.Every day I keep hopin' that I may see a sign.
Better give me a chance girl, to be first in your eyes.
But I just go on waitin', every day it's the same.
All my friends keep on sayin', "You're a fool who loves pain!"But all I wanna do, Pretty Lady, is see you smilin' too, Pretty Lady,
And maybe once in my life makin' love to you. Yeah
All I wanna do, Pretty Lady, is see you smilin' too, Pretty Lady,
Maybe once in my life makin' love to you.I'm beginnin' to wonder, if you know I'm alive.
Every day it gets harder to feel good when I rise.
If I just had a chance, girl, you could feel what it's like
Makin' love every mornin', every day, every night.Cuz all I wanna do, Pretty Lady, is see you smilin' too, Pretty Lady,
Maybe once in my life makin' love to you. Yeah,
All I wanna do, Pretty Lady, is see you smilin' too, Pretty Lady,
Maybe once in my life makin' love to you. Yeah,
All I wanna do, Pretty Lady, is see you smilin' too, Pretty Lady,
Maybe once in my life makin' love to you.
Good luck!

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That is wonderful, NerosMom.
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Thanks, Virginia. It brought back a fond memory of falling in love. He did indeed, get lucky!
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...and your story may be an inspiration, encouragement to this man, Dovahkin...
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