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Opinions? I'm writing a book and would like to hear what people have to say. Don't say anything mean please.

Ok, here's part of it.
There is this mysterious man who doesnt even give out his name. He tells people to call himself "The Double-Swordsmen." because he is a master at using two swords his father had before he unfortunately died. All throughout towns he is known for showing up randomly and saving them. All the places he saves though have the same problem.
I could write more but I don't even know if anyone's interested in it. Please tell me what you think as long as it isn't hurtful

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i'm guessing you know nothing about swordplay, so I will assist you here, don't call him the double swordsmen/swordsman. The term for someone who uses two blades is "Dual-Wielder", and Dual-Wielder sounds a lot cooler than double swordsmen/swordsman. Aside from that, your concept is good, I would probably read it as long as the swordplay is described in a believable manner, and the plotline isn't linear or clichéd. So your new character name should be "The Dual-Wielder"

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Thank you that helped a lot :)
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" The Double-Swordsmen" = The Double-Swordsman
I think you should publish a chapter online (Wattpad/Figment) and ask for feedback.

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Seems pretty interesting to me. I'd read it.

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I'd read it

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sounds good...;)

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I would read it, but it just needs more deatail.

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I like it! I bet I'd read it. May I suggest a tip to make it more of a pleasure to read? I will anyway. Lol.
When writing anything really, you need to not make the sentences choppy. And some ands, buts, and ors. And more details like when this story takes place, where, what time of year. You don't have to state what time of year it is, just hint it. It draws a reader in even more if you say something like," As he stood on the hill looking down on the pillaged town, he felt the cool spring air swirl around him and pull at the grass at his feet." This gives you a visual and hint at what's going on.
Also, doing as much research as you can on swordsmen would be helpful. You want to make sure you have you the facts right and it's realistic to a certain degree. Writing a book takes a lot of hard work and dedication.
I wish you well and have fun writing your book! I hope these tips helped! :)

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good (follow samuraikenshin's advice though) but make sure you add more twists to the plot and show rather than tell
try playing with emotions, it's always interesting to read (in my opinion)

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I appreciate the vote of confidence :)
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anytime
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